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To begin I would like to comment on how we managed to focus our subject from the initial brief. The first idea involved a traffic accident however as we began to evolve scenes and routines we saw how the plot came across 'cheesy' and to simplistic. Therefore we went back to the drawing board and decided upon a topic which we had some prior knowledge in, this would be the use of seat-belts (or lack of). Then as we ran some ideas we noticed that this would be the subject we could use for the piece.
ReplyDeleteTo continue the group decided to focus on the implications of the crash on the child, the pearents, a doctor and a pedestrian. So we created this basic run through,
ReplyDeleteScene 1 - the child, to be portrayed by Kristian
Scene 2 - the pearents, Liam and Blessing
Scene 3 - the doctor, Robert
Scene 4 - a pedestrian, Jess
There was also the possibilty of adding a final scene at the end for the child, to make the plot cyclical. I would like to know what you all think.
By this do you mean out beginning at the end so it show the tradegy of what has happened in the beginning but then show the story in how it come to happen
DeleteHere are some ideas for script aswell, let me know what you think. They are based on some research I found on how people cope with car accidents.
ReplyDelete[the character is teenager, dazed and confused and unaware of their surroundings]
(Walks forward during the blackout, lies down on the block at the front center of the stage, this is a voice over synchronised with a routine to be performed.)
Kristen: Wait... What happen...where, where am I, I don't really, remember much. [slight gasp] Oh! Thats I was with mum and dad and we, we were coming home from Grans. So where am I [sees the medical wristband] patient 70 age 16, traffic incident... Wait my seatbelt, I wasn't wearing my seatbelt! [looks directly at audience] you hear all these stories you know as a kid, school assemblies, adverts on the tele and you never think it matters to you. Like whats a seatbelt going to do... I remember hearing this fact that 10% of people don't out on seatbelts because they cant be bothered, well that me was me... and look were it got me, I, I, hope my parents are okay...
(Blackout character then returns to original position)
Learning from comments that were brought up in class, that this script was to naturlistic, this made me confused as to what we are doing.
Delete[characters are distraught, then begin in shock but this evolves into anger and blaming each other, then concluding with forgiveness and reflections about their child]
ReplyDelete(Bee and Liam move forward onto the block center stage, they sit rigid and stiff. The following is a voice over)
(There is whispers heard from Robert, bee and Liam)
Liam: I sorry, darling they can't tell me anything
Bee: but why Liam surely they must know something!
Liam: look, look I promise everything will be okay
(Silence) (the following dialogue evolves into an argument)
Bee: It was my fault..
Liam: (Silence) no, no I driving
Bee: But I should of checked
Liam: darling you cant be blamed, he not a child
Bee: its my job though i'm the mother I am meant to look after him
Liam: no thats my responsibility, I was driving, I was meant to be watching the road
Bee: [in disbelief] what?
Liam: I, I got distracted it was something silly, darling look it was only for a second, I didn't even see the other car
Bee: it was you, you did this, your the reason our sons in the hospital!, I can't even look at you
(Silence)
Liam: I'm sorry...
Bee: sorry, your sorry; [anger] sorry doesn't cut it, What if he doesn't recover, what then
(No response)
Bee: i'm sorry, I am just looking for someone to blame; I just keep going over it again and again in my mind and then I can't stop thinking of the worst, [cries and hugs Liam]
Liam: ... I swear darling I wont let anything happen.
Robert: you can see him now
(Bee and Liam return to their original positions)
http://www.noys.org/seat_belt_statistics.aspx
ReplyDeletehttp://www.carkoon.com/blog/seatbelts-save-lives-lancashire-case-study
https://www.tacsafety.com.au/__data/assets/pdf_file/0016/5326/Seatbelt_Case_Study.pdf
http://mentalhealth.about.com/library/sci/0701/blasd0602.htm
http://voices.yahoo.com/how-handle-teens-first-car-accident-5-top-10142545.html
While I enjoy the script, one concern I have, as an actor, is that of our practitioner. While I know we were looking into 'Physical Theatre', the umbrella is just so wide I think we'll benefit from looking at some other physical theatre troupes/productions. One of my favourite ones is DV8's "The Cost of Living". Here's a playlist with some of the parts on:
ReplyDeletehttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b1dxc02GKL8&list=PLEA0FCE55E33C098F
But of course, all of that is very abstract... I'm worried we'll fall into one of two extremes; either too literal, or too artsy. Do you have any ideas for routines, in terms of theme/idea/emotion? The script is great, it's the actual physicality I'm worried about.
I looked into this as apart of my Research Investigation and in terms of the physical element there would have to be a literal routine because of the subject, for the emotion I would suggest a somber tone will dull emotion to express how defeated and subduded the family are but a natural and perhaps perky for the rest of the characters. However I will converse with Robert to see if we shall continue with the routines combinded with voiceovers.
ReplyDeleteAlright, then. The idea of a dull atmosphere seems like a good one, especially if we're looking into brechtian influences. Though, I'll probably end up retreating into some 'Method' acting rituals or looking up some Stanislavski. While I understand there's a need for didactics, I think a topic like this needs to also show the actual, poignant emotions that are borne out of these situations.
ReplyDeleteAs for the voice overs, I think, while it would be good, practically, for us to perfect our parts offstage and import them into an area where we can focus purely on our physical movements, we'll need to perfect the timing! Though, I'm sure that's something our tech managers can think about. ^^
so like we were talking about scrubs as costumes and found them to be really expensive like £100 expensive or over for everyone we made compromises and came up with the idea of disposable painters overalls so doing some internet shopping like a good prop pimp i am i found these http://www.screwfix.com/p/keepsafe-disposable-coveralls-42-46-chest-31-leg/17133# meaning no awkward size questions and all together they would cost like £12.95 for all of you non-stage-hands :)
ReplyDeleteI really like your idea there Jamie, as I think it suit each of our character, you know what it reminds me if those detective shows where there are doing the fingerprint search on a stolen car that's ended up in a road accident.
Deletehttp://www.thelegalline.co.uk/road_traffic_accidents_road-traffic-accidents-uninsured-stolen-vehicles.aspx
The above link is some facts on the right of people when they have been involved in a crash with insured and uninsured drivers aswell as stollen cars
I really likr the costume ideas Jamie, I think you have stuck to the breuf and expanded from there, also Kristian I like you methods to include 'the method'. So please keep that up, in terms of the voiceovers I have discussed with Robert and only the non-reality scenes will have voiceovers, thats yours Kristian and possibly Robert we shall converse more.
ReplyDeleteI would also like to post the rehersals, tyey are Monday, Tuesday and Wednesday in drama studio 1, 3:10pm- 4:10 pm, and if possible we can meet up in out free periods tomorow to organise and reherse scenes and possibly do a running order.
The rehearsals after school are fine for me Liam,
DeleteI like the way it switches between voice over to live speech, I prefer this to every scene having voice over
Liam and Robert I'm having difficulty in getting my character to sound and be in e style of a gossiping old person or like "Norris" from corrie
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aIiDKXqAZbY okay so this might help specially look at the tone of his voice and the pauses; anymore problems speak to me and Robert.
DeleteI apologize for my spelling I am reduded to typing on my phone.
ReplyDeleteAs angel asked me kindly to post this for her as it won't let her post at all
ReplyDeleteHey guys,
this is a really good website i found that has tons of information on road safety report so check it out!
i think it will be really useful and helpful! angel x
https://www.gov.uk/government/publications/road-safety-research-and-statistical-reports
This website was extremly helpful in just facts without emotional entanglement. However the language felt to advance to draw on to a younger audience but we can still 'translate' the language. What do you think?
DeleteRight so after today I think that one of the new questions that we face is that of the practitioner. Kristian has also made this point further above however I fell that we need to select a practitioner that we are knowledgeable on. A good idea for this would be either Boal or Brecht. I understand that we are using Brecht's idea of didacticism coupled with Edward Gordon Craig's set design.
ReplyDeletehttp://us.123rf.com/400wm/400/400/thisboy/thisboy1007/thisboy100700006/7280088-childrens-alphabet-blocks-spelling-the-words-play-time.jpg
The above link is an idea for one of our stage designs/props.
The child-like element should prove to enforce the idea of the child's innocence and of the unjust nature of his demise/comatose.
I don't think that saying okay this practioner works, once we have a clear understanding of what we are doing then we should discuss what elemets from a broad spectrum we wish to include to make our peice the best possible. Also I didn't know there was the elemet of Edward Gordon Craig so I will try harder in my role to comminucat Ive had a real narrow mindeness latly that I didnt even realise I had. The link certainly shows what the blocks should look like, as I do not know about you but they exove a childish reponse.
DeleteWell the Craig style blocks were in idea that we had decided on quite early on, though I'm not sure if they can be applied now.
DeleteNow we have included them in the background it would work, obviously scaled down but to work in the same manner and perhaphs include Artaud's teachings on light and disort it into new possibilities. These are all suggests like.
DeleteThis is the script I created for the character of 'Dirty Dan' I would like some feedback to see were I can modify him for a younger audience as I am currently changinf this monolgue to suit the suggestions made in the lesson. That he should have more energy and be more interactive with the audience.
ReplyDeleteHey you, look yeah you, at the back... listen mate have I got an offer for you. The best cars, shiny cars, pink cars for you... and a trucik for you sir and you kid there one that looks like a transformer. How old are you sir? yeah to young for a seatbelt a booster seat maybe I do them aswell. You've got as licence right. The cars yeah, got them off the back of a lorry, and I could get them for you for tomorrow night, and the police are none the wiser HA!. £500 done deal, cheap as chips.
I was lloking for energy to this character and I also recived suggests to say issues with the cars I will take this onboard and post a new draft soon. I would like to know peoples opinions of the character and what he represents which a face to the crime and a comedic villian.
Here is a reworking, let me know what you think:
ReplyDeleteDirty Dan: Hey, you Yeah you at the back you looking for a car, cheap as chips, money in hand no questions asked. Look you yeah you I've got the car for you... seatbelt slightly dodgy, well I say dodgy you have to hold is whilst driving still it’s a Ferrari, but except from that it's fine... o office looking for a deal of a lifetime I've got police verchile there big truck it is, to match your uniform everything okay with it... if you don’t mind it only flashes blue. You there I've got one in the back, brand new car looks like a transformer, yeah I'm not joking... wait how old are you... well you don’t need a license even better. O 'love' you in the market for an automobile, well I don't think you can miss out on the bargain of the century perfect for you speeding needs, well if speeding is all your after... brakes are kind of temperamental you see. However if speed is all after I wouldn't worry... So role up ladies and grab your bargain grab your wheels!
This is a basic runthrought that Blessing, Robert and myself created on Friday:
ReplyDeleteScene 1 - Intdroduction to characters, Kelly-anne, Derek, Aaron's older brother (not yet named, any suggestions)
Scene 2 - 'Dirty Dan', Dirty Dan and Customer
Scene 3 - 'P.c.' Gallagher - Gallagher
Scene 4- 'And then' We hear what happened to the character and what happened to them being the characterters from the introduction.
Scene 5- 'Kelly-Anne' Kelly's monologue
Scene 6- 'Sarah Lousie' - Her monologue
Scene 7- Krisian, This has kept this open for you, to include a character.
Scene 8- Kelly and Sharon- Louise
Scene 9, 'And what really happened' this scene includes everyone from the introduction to discuss what really happened as the name suggests.
Scene 10- Physical theatre perfromance (I would like to know if people have ideas for this)
Scene 11- The conclusion, IO was thinking haveing a final scene with a resolution, but I would like to know what people think.
Also Kristian we have made our character from imporvistaion sessions but feel free to the scene given and make it your own (this could be a monologue or include other cast memembers). The same with the introdution and the 'And then' scene, and 'what really happened' however these were devolped from true stories.
i like the scene run through dont get me wrong, but can we either move pc gallagher or dirty dan as im on 4 scene in a row there and everyone else is spread and chance to coustume change. it gonna be very tight for me to coustume to change and get into the next scene in the scene change over with being in the pervious scene
DeleteThe updated run through after wednesday lesson is:
DeleteIntroduction to characters
Dirty Dan and the bus driver
Sharon +kelly
Physical theatre
Final monologues
How is this
there 2 scene been added into this so the updated run through now is:
Deleteintroduction to characters
dirty dan and the bus driver
sharon and kelly
pc gallagher
physical theatre
paramedic and police woman
final monologues
Also if people could email me with their script, I shall put it all together to print our for monday.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.no-excuses.org.uk/
ReplyDeleteA very useful website with local road safety information and various "Topics of interest"
what are people views on bringing back Lucy at the end, because the auricle are going to be confused in what her relevance is at the begging if the play and we never know what happens nor hear anything.
ReplyDeletemy suggestion would be to bring her back and show that being on a bike and getting hit by the car is also dangerous and her into the final monologues scene
Well the two was of doing this I think
Delete1) Have her mother talking about her death
2) Lucy explaing what happened
I personally think that the second option is better, we allready have the death of Sharon- Louise and I ame kinda against and unnecessary.
i think killing her off aswell as sharon louise i think is unessary think it better if she cycling home and what involved in the crash as the car was out of control and hit aaron and lucy, would be the easier option and we could portay her, being injured by using badages or cruthes or something like that.
DeleteHey Kris if you see this I want to know you thoughts on the scene between the busdriver and dirty dan, and to anyone else any content you liked or should be included in the script.
ReplyDeleteConering costumes I know we have discussed this before but how does everyone feel on the ful black this to make costume changes quicker by adding a jacket or top, and I was thinking for dirty dan keep the orange blazer. However for Aaron wearing a cap and a hoodie, also somthing that Jamie suggested was to have me playing a with a DS. What do you think?
ReplyDeletelike the idea of full black as the base coustume and added a hoodie on to reconize the characters at the begging
Deletei also like jamie's idea of you liam using and ds for idea.
also coustume wise i know me a kristian need for the second to final scene soemthing that repersent us as a police man and a paramedic
One final thing, when me and Bee where devising some physical theatre she played a sequence of car sounds
ReplyDeletehttp://m.youtube.com/#/watch?v=_TXTfLKIFrk&desktop_uri=%2Fwatch%3Fv%3D_TXTfLKIFrk
Which I then put on alongside the 30 Seconds to Mars track, up in the air which was playing, weirdly the movement allready devised by Robert and Bee just worked with it and me and her just added some small changes. However if you could give the link and the 30 seconds to mars song a listen at the same tme and just say what you think.